Thursday, August 8, 2013

55 fiction - Love in the cafe and Deathly mystery

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I have been eyeing on writing a 55 fiction from a very long time. Thanks to the "Write Tribe", I tried writing this one on love and mystery. I have tried to write each of it in a single sentence accepting the challenge put forth.
Love in the cafe

 He sat exactly three tables away looking strikingly handsome in a blue tshirt intriguing my heartbeats insanely and although we had never spoken to each other our eyes met aimlessly; sighing hopelessly I left the cafeteria to my work floor when a message beeped which read, “Hi, wondering who I am? Guy in the blue tshirt”


Deathly Mystery

Loosening his grip he dropped me on the bed and nudged a knife piercing through the veins in my stomach ,splashing drops of blood across ,I scream and wake up instantaneously realizing it was a dream and reach out to drink water ; my hands shiver as I find gory blood stains on the ground.  

23 comments:

  1. UnknownAugust 8, 2013 at 9:59 AM

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  2. Vidya SuryAugust 9, 2013 at 10:18 AM

    Great premise on both, Cynthia. Are you sure this is the first time you're writing 55 fiction? They are both very good. Congratulations on taking up the one-sentence challenge! :D

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  3. Cynthia VincentAugust 9, 2013 at 10:30 AM

    Thank you so much Vidya for the feedback. Yes this is the first time I wrote 55 fiction. Thanks to you for the challenge or I wouldn't have tried writing one..

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  4. My Say! India.August 10, 2013 at 7:42 AM

    fabulous both the stories .. the first one was a thriller :)

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  5. Cynthia VincentAugust 10, 2013 at 10:55 PM

    Thank you Jack.... :)

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  6. Ranveer vishalAugust 14, 2013 at 6:54 AM

    Hey Cynthia love both of them on love and spooky. My fav subjects and beautifully told:)
    Cheerz
    Vishal
    www.vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com

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  7. richasinghAugust 14, 2013 at 7:53 AM

    the one sentence challenge was quite something! And you did it! superb. I liked the second one more :)


    Richa

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  8. Cynthia VincentAugust 14, 2013 at 7:59 AM

    Thank you so much Ranveer. Glad you liked them. I am on my way to your blog now :)

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  9. Cynthia VincentAugust 14, 2013 at 8:00 AM

    Hey Richa yeah it was a real challenge to pen the entire story in one sentence. Am happy you liked it :)

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  10. TweetsmomAugust 22, 2013 at 4:23 AM

    I liked both of your 55 fictions!! The first one sweet, and the second one...WOW. If it was a dream, where did the blood come from?? Awesome!!! You rocked both of them.

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  11. jitendra vaswaniAugust 24, 2013 at 2:29 AM

    Superb Cynthia :)

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  12. Ramakant PradhanSeptember 15, 2013 at 5:58 AM

    Fantastic work. Both are good but the second one is just awesome.

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  13. Vinod ThekkeettilSeptember 27, 2013 at 9:04 AM

    We can put the first one also in Mystery....

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  14. NikhilOctober 18, 2013 at 12:48 AM

    Loved both of 'em but second's a lil. more preferable. Amazing how you summed it up in one sentence Cynthia. Well chosen words indeed! :)
    http://aficionadolog.blogspot.com/

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  15. Cynthia VincentOctober 18, 2013 at 1:14 AM

    Thank you so much Ramakant

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  16. Cynthia VincentOctober 18, 2013 at 1:14 AM

    Oh yes you could do that as well.. :)

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  17. Cynthia VincentOctober 18, 2013 at 1:15 AM

    Thank you so much Nikhil. Encouraging words indeed. And yes summing it into one sentence was a little difficult :) am on my way to your blog now :)

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  18. Priya SOctober 28, 2013 at 3:45 AM

    your "to be continued" often gets on my nerves.. aarrgggggg...

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  19. Cynthia VincentOctober 28, 2013 at 3:57 AM

    Haha... That is the whole thing about keeping you hooked Priya :)

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  20. ReshmaOctober 28, 2013 at 2:55 PM

    Nice to read your post after a long time Cynthia. Life is very strange, just when you think it is headed in one way, it takes an unexpected turn, hope to read the next part soon...

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  21. usha menonOctober 28, 2013 at 6:58 PM

    Hi Cynthia, I just happened to land here and read the story. How cruel can a man be, Playing with the emotions of a simple girl. You have developed the story beautifully. Cant wait long to know about Nina's reaction.

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  22. Cynthia VincentOctober 28, 2013 at 9:39 PM

    Hi Reshma, Yea I updated my blog after a really long time. Was busy with writing something else. Yes surely life is strange. And without strange things happening life is never complete. Will post the next part soon. Thank you so much for dropping by :)

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  23. Cynthia VincentOctober 28, 2013 at 9:40 PM

    Ushaji. Thank you so much for your valuable comment. Yes Vikram surely is a mean guy. Will post the next part soon

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